What they see that I don’t see.
Where I blocked out that accident sequence step-by-step – was more confusing than if I had been less specific. Sometimes less is letting the reader draw his own conclusions.
POV confusion and tense changes, and that is worth millions bec I can’t see that stuff for all the huge, overwhelming problems I imagine when I reread a page six times.
Change chapter 2 to 3 and vice versa – really? Never would have thought of that for a solution to pacing.
More to follow